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Quick story to go along with a certain picture. I guess this is the...sequel? Like, the day after, or something. It stars that jester, at any rate.

Beware, the content''s a little extreme.



Chapter 0 - The Greatest Show on Earth
Submitted: December 30, 2009 • Updated: December 30, 2009
Word count: 2898 • Size: 15k • Comments: 31 • views: 37474


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Rakked on January 5, 2013, 8:47:37 PM

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RakkedGod, that was awesome. The pictures fabulous, too :)

lyricality on June 25, 2012, 10:24:45 AM

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lyricalityThe story made me horny and laugh at the same time ... that, my friend, is as good as it gets.

scorp29 on December 3, 2010, 9:38:10 AM

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scorp29Héhé, I liked your story =)

If I was the Beastman, I would keep only for me my prey.

But I didn't see coming what you planed for her x)

raistlinmajere on August 29, 2010, 6:53:25 AM

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raistlinmajereNot bad...not bad at all

DemonBlood on April 23, 2010, 12:52:44 AM

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DemonBloodHmm.. It's a great story I'll admit but I really imagined her...smaller, kinda like tira from SC4 but just shorter like if she were 13 or so... >_> <_<

Solomon on March 16, 2010, 12:54:32 PM

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SolomonHm. I could have sworn there was another picture on this very site featuring the jester girl and Murry, but by an artist other than Sparrow.

Sparrow on March 18, 2010, 11:36:51 AM

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SparrowEcchi-Graffiti did a picture of them, yeah. Look him up if you haven't already.

And also D3l7a3ch0 did a single picture of them, which is here in the comments, actually.

TigerofWu on March 9, 2010, 7:35:10 AM

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TigerofWu'Congratulations, balls are now empty. Remove hand from penis, lean back, let out a long breath, smile and remember to thank Sparrow later.'

Awesome story dude. I haven't really read many hentai/porn stories (I'm a dabbler =3) but I saw your affection for them and figured if someone with as good tastes as you enjoy them they shouldn't be disappointing. And disappointing it was not. I must definitely check out more... after I've reloaded, of course X)

PoastToasties on January 19, 2010, 2:42:21 PM

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PoastToastiesWonderous story my good man. Quite the tale. I blew my wad and didn't notice till I was done reading.

D3l7a3ch0 on January 15, 2010, 5:36:20 PM

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Sparrow on January 16, 2010, 2:33:13 AM

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...Wow. Didn't expect that, man.
Thank you!

D3l7a3ch0 on January 18, 2010, 10:19:32 PM

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Sparrow on January 27, 2010, 10:05:31 PM

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Sparrow...Ayup, day made. :D

fuck101 on January 2, 2010, 12:20:44 PM

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fuck101wow awesome as all heck 10/10

cuntzilla on January 1, 2010, 12:03:13 PM

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cuntzillasweet jesus fuck! XD the picture goes well with this

Jasole on December 31, 2009, 8:29:04 AM

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JasoleYou my good Sparrow are a God among men

drhobophd on December 31, 2009, 6:22:22 AM

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drhobophdIt's official, I love everything Sparrow does, large insertions, deep throat, excessive cum. Like somebody listing off the things I like.

Sir you have inspired me to continue the stories I abandoned.

Sparrow on January 1, 2010, 2:15:18 AM

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SparrowYay! Best news I've heard all day.

Thanks man, glad I could be of service.

Shadowen on December 31, 2009, 5:26:45 AM

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ShadowenPretty damn awesome, dude.

Nice picture accompaniment.

Chameleus on December 30, 2009, 6:56:52 AM

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ChameleusNice story. Wish I could say more, but my head's out of place at the moment. I will note that I like the level of detail, really gets you a good visualization, and as usual the over-the-top hardcoreness makes it hot as hell.

salarta on December 30, 2009, 3:28:02 AM

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salartaDid a quick read. I think the starting premise is great, an after hours show just for the grown ups. The use of a jester girl in itself is something I've come to like, because it's just really amusing to take things in that direction. There's some stylistic things that could be improved, and others that are merely a personal difference, but I know this story is more of a quick fun thing for you so I won't go into detail about them.

The only other thing for me to really say is that from what I read, it doesn't feel like you take full advantage of the scenario. Your picture for the story had an excellent idea behind it that makes use of the carnival atmosphere; she's a painted up sex game, fuck her good and hard to win a prize. Your picture also puts emphasis on her sex appeal, as if she's trying to draw attention to it. Maybe it's just personal preference, but I think the greatest potential for this setting would come from sex acts where she uses her body and sometimes makes a fool of herself. Things like pulling a tied line of rags from her pussy, or squirting something from her bra (or releasing a gas from it), or falling off a balance ball and using her tits to cushion the fall. Basically things that turn her body into another big prop to give people a good laugh. The way it reads currently, it seems like more of a sex show only in a big tent with a woman wearing a strange outfit, rather than a carnival event with a sexual jester.

I hope my comment here comes out more positive than negative, because the last thing I want to do is discourage you. :) Good luck with future projects!

Sparrow on December 30, 2009, 4:10:30 AM

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SparrowThe picture came about after the story was mostly done, so it's more the other way around: this story is the main part, and the picture's just a little sideshow going off of something said in the story (the part about her booth).

And personally, if she were making a fool of herself I wouldn't like things as much. The empowered woman is always more attractive to me, and if she were more of a bumbling clown and less a fanciful gymnast with a not-so-hidden penchant for sex, it wouldn't be as fun for me.

But yeah the whole thing's basically an excuse to write about large insertions and deepthroat. You got me. ^~^;

Spaceman on December 30, 2009, 2:33:15 PM

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SpacemanHey man, I've always preferred the empowered woman (and so does my boner, lol), even if she's being throat-fucked. I'm glad you didn't go for the "fool" thing, because I don't think this would have made me cum as many times as it did if you had. So...thanks! :D

You, sir, are a god.

salarta on December 30, 2009, 4:25:35 AM

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salartaAh, understood! Everyone has their kinks, in certain cases I like strong women too, but they tend to end up more like antagonists than anything else. I just happen to love the bumbling joke angle for jester girl hentai. :) And now that you mention it, the flexible gymnast angle might add to the vibe even more with all the potential acts to do with her well-trained body that a normal woman might not be able to pull off.

You probably won't see this, if you're not getting notifications like I never seem to anymore for my stories. :P

Sparrow on December 30, 2009, 6:58:19 AM

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SparrowYeah just a difference of opinion/taste. No biggie.

And yeah I don't know what's up with the comment notification for stories these days. I only noticed it was an issue after that site update from a month ago for the oekaki program and stuff.

salarta on December 30, 2009, 10:16:32 AM

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salartaYeah, this site's slowly stripped away features for the stories and I have absolutely no idea why. First it was removing the views counter for chapters, next it's the comment notifications for stories altogether. It doesn't seem like the mods or admins care at all either, I sent an E-mail about it and they ignored said E-mail. Hopefully these things don't mean we'll lose a stories section altogether some time soon, if that's how little they care about it right now.

zetsu1 on December 31, 2009, 5:38:05 PM

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zetsu1man i am totally for the stories, i personally find that a picture is ok, comics are great, but stories are at the top. but they get even better with an accompanying pic. i find that the background and storyline are what really get me, so if we were to loose the story section, i might have to find a different sight. an that would just be annoying.

RIFT on December 30, 2009, 2:13:07 AM

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RIFTThat was pretty awesome. I can only imagine the artwork that would go with this story, other than the pic you drew. It's vivid enough for it, plus, I'm trying to remember anything I've seen or read that included a horse-headed (pun definitely intended) beast-man having his way with a jester-girl. I mean, there's that one live-action Japanese thing, but that was more funny than arousing.

Sparrow on December 30, 2009, 2:34:36 AM

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SparrowHorse-headed Japanese thing you say? .

But seriously, yeah it's...vivid. I don't like to draw the same characters over and over if I can help it, so you probably won't see a picture based on this, but it's nice to dream.

Glad you like it though. I'm still new to the writing thing, so that's encouraging.

BI on December 30, 2009, 12:09:19 AM

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BIGood, story. The picture goes good with it too.

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